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Well here it is. Pretty much the finished article barring stuff I spot introduced due to my bad proof-reading. All of the poems were inspired by the House on the Rock. SOme are more straightforwardly descriptive than others.
Note I can't get "The Mikado and the Unseen Orchestra" to display how I wanted (in two columns) so I've had to compromise. It should be two spoken poems read simultaneously - one in normal type, one in itallics. Enjoy. And feel free to comment. --------------------------------------- The House on The Rock Come up to the House on the Rock. March by to the tick and the tock of the clock. Come to marvel at mysteries, or simply to mock, But come, nonetheless, to the House on the Rock. Enclosed Infinity There is no end to the line, To the infinite, imprisoned, unchanging design That stretches beyond and before and around, Between Heaven and Hell, between sky and ground. There is a world I can see, But the glass holds it separate from me. As I press my face hard to the cold And watch this reality as the stories unfold, The vertigo viewpoint succeeds In feeding and watering the paranoid seeds, And I think, far away, I hear music that plays Metric and measured, a stately and slow polonaise. Step into the House on the Rock, Where time does not rule, there's no tick, there's no tock Just the shifting and subtle illusions of shock When you venture inside, at the House on the Rock. What kind of person would live in a house like this? Was it built? Did it grow? Did it just appear so Overnight, One night? Did it spring from the Earth, did the Angels give birth To this sight, This delight? There's a taste of the East, and a hint of the Beast In the gloom Of the room. There are shelves filled with books in the crannies and nooks But for whom, Do they loom? There are eggs made of stone, there are figures of bone In array On display. There's the sound of a band but there's no mortal hand Here to play, For today. There's a Tiffany lamp but it carries a stamp There to show, That it's faux. It's a box of delights, It's a trick of the light But the glow's Getting low What kind of person would live in a house like this? Who'd dance with bogeymen down on the sharp precipice? Who'd haul rocks to the top of the mountain and do it by hand Just to see if the mountain would turn out the way that he'd planned? Was it built? Did it grow? Did it just appear so Overnight, One night? Did it spring from the Earth or did Nature give birth To this sight, This delight? A man stands in the rocks. He's surrounded by flocks Of strange birds It's absurd. All this bric-a-brac shines in a thousand designs Till we're spurred To find words For the things that we've seen here and there and between But there's more To explore. It's time to be going and we march on unknowing To the door The new door. Come back to the House on the Rock, To jewels and the gems and the schlock To the weird and the wonderful stock. Come back to the House on the Rock. A collection of collections: Part 1: Hemispheres In his house he had a case full of tiny Universes, Of frozen explosions, of luminescent flowers, Of slices of time and spirals of space, All captured in hemispheres of glass. He showed them as a child shows a mayfly, Captured in cupped hands, precious and fragile, Eternity trapped in a moment of grace, Undying, unchanging, waiting for the world to pass. A Collection of Collections: Part 2: The Golden Age of Steam In his house he had a room where motion was caught Behind a window in the wall, upon a shelf, Where it became forever the Golden Age of Steam, And the liveried engines stood in a trackless waste. He showed them as a young man shows his car Exuberant and boastful; this is mine, this is me, See how I have taken hold of the dream. See how I have tamed and conquered reckless haste. A Collection of Collections: Part 3: Looking After The Pennies In his house he had a wall where everything was safe, Where the tokens of pecuniary hope were held Inside minute houses and animals and heads, Inside the tin-plate mechanisms of desire. He showed them as an old man shows his treasures Reluctantly, protecting them with the tightest irony. These toys that should be holding are held instead; Symbols of acquisition turned to objects to acquire. Come along now through the House on the Rock, Praise it in whispers, raise voices to knock Stare at the strangeness that stands chockablock. Come along now through the House on the Rock. The Devil's Carousel I will pass by the mouth of Hell I will not ride this carousel I will not heed the tolling bell I will pass by the mouth of Hell Above the circling angels see The carnival that's tempting me But I remain apart and free While still the circling angels see. The fabulous, fantastic wheel Turns and turns to still reveal Monsters strange, deformed, surreal Revolving here upon this wheel. I have no need of surpliced priest For though I watch each prancing beast That Hell's menagerie released I do not need a surplus priest. The fabulous, fantastic wheel Turns and turns to still reveal Monsters strange, deformed, surreal Revolving here upon this wheel. I will pass by the mouth of Hell I will not ride this carousel I will not heed the tolling bell I will pass by the mouth of Hell Keep going on through the House on the Rock. Stroll slowly along to the end of the block. Pause to consider, rest to take stock, Then keep going on through the House on the Rock. Streetwise It's a small town in a bottle In an everlasting twilight Never quite escaping daytime, Never stepping into night. All the people have deserted Their positions and their posts, And the sidewalks and the storefronts Have been left to twilight ghosts. The horologist stepped out Of his allotted time and place. The clocks he left behind him Are fully wound and keeping pace. The apothecary's gone From his powders and his potions, From his pills and panaceas, From his liniments and lotions. The barber's chair stands empty, The porcelain is clean, No blood stains mar the razor; The shop remains pristine. The fire truck's gleaming pumps Are polished up like gold. The firehouse dog is sleeping. The fire-bell's never tolled. In the sheriff's office Stands the Head of Joaquim, Pickled in a jar, Looking shrivelled, old and grim. The picket fence surrounds The house at Main Street's end And the visitor with half-closed eyes Can silently pretend That the past is trapped in amber And this is somehow real Not a fantasy of history Built solely to conceal. Small Leviathan Carved on the tooth of a whale, A whale, A tiny perfect evocation Of the leviathan. Minute whaling ships Surround it And smaller still Deck-bound harpoonists, Have their arms back, Trapped in the moment Before the motion, Before the battle With the beast Whose tooth Begins the tale anew. The Mikado and the Unseen Orchestra: a poem for two voices It begins, It begins, The faint tinkling The slow drawn bow Of prayer bells. On violin strings. Mannequin eyes Mechanical Move in motionless Movements by unseen Faces. Hands. Gongs sound, Cello Strings vibrate, And viola, The wu-man and the pipa Timpani and piano Join the mix. Join the mix. A crescendo builds, A crescendo builds, A rising cascade of sound An emergent symphony And fury. Of melody. The Mikado And the unseen orchestra. Come down deep in the House on the Rock, Where the darkness holds sway, devils mocked And it seems that your escape is now blocked. Come down deep in the House on the Rock. Inferno : Part 1 These monstrous engines drive the world; The boilers, shafts, propellers, cogs; The pistons, blocks, the pits of flame. Around these loathsome shapes are curled The paths where sinners creep like dogs – Stripped of dignity, of pride, of name. This inferno is the engine room, the very base of base desire, The foundry where all sin is made And loosed to call all men to doom And eternity within this fire. Here are our weaknesses displayed. Voices in the Void And yet… Even Hell must have light and shade. Without virtue there can be no sin And so the engines sometimes pause and fade And still for a moment their clam'rous din. So as the engines fall silent, one by one, Then the void is filled with voices wailing And when the tumult is, for an instant, gone It might seem that even Hell is failing. Inferno: Part 2 But then… The hum begins again, the shafts resume their turning And the sound of mighty organs accompanies the burning. There is thunder in the darkness, an inferno in the hole. There is everlasting pain in every corner of the soul. Move up through the House on the Rock. Follow the sound of the bleat of the flock. Listen again for time's ticking clock. Move up through the House on the Rock. The Dolls' Carousel "Oh Mother! Aren't they a dream?" I hear a child whisper. I do not agree. This carousel of dolls makes me scream At the frozen fleshless faces, The eyes that do not see, Following without moving, Fixed on me. I feel my flesh creep and die. "Oh look at that tiny one! Divine! Such gorgeous clothes, So petite, so sweet." It isn't sweet, I can't define The way they make me feel, Their rank and file, perfect, neat An undead, plastic army Of incomplete Soulless homunculi. Step out of the House on the Rock And back to the world of the clock Where time flows once, tick and tock. Step out of the House on the Rock. Dragons in Daylight I have escaped into morning But even now in daylight I still see the dragons That haunted my darkness. Dream of the House on the Rock, Of all that was seen, and all that was not Of all you recalled and all you forgot Dream evermore of the House on the Rock. Coda: Things I Never Saw I have walked inside a stranger's mind And seen the flotsam left behind As the tides of sanity receded from the shore. I have felt the things a stranger felt, Played the hand that he was dealt. Was this a simple game of chance? Was it really nothing more? I never saw the circus clowns. I saw no sceptres, saw no crowns. I never saw the planes and cars, The butterflies and killing jars. I heard no music boxes play. They must await another day, For if I could look for ever more. There would be things I never saw. This message has been edited. Last edited by: BobHale, "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Kudos and bravo, Bob! what a tour de force.I am especially impressed with your control and manipulation of speed and rhythm (by which I mean to include the use of rhyme). You pick up a wonderful speed and whirling at the carousel. And you treat us to a suite of variations through the changes from Inferno 1 through Voices in the Void to Inferno 2: I feel like I'm part of one of those Animusic videos. Throughout, the italicized quatrain picks it up and keeps it moving-- this verse has a way of reminding you, when things begin to get dark, that it's all entertainment. The Mikado and the Unseen Orchestra is masterful, and it is timed perfectly: by that point, I have music in my head, and you spell it out for us.
A tiny suggestion: you might want to edit down the Small Leviathan and the Doll Carousel, make them shorter and tighter. Both seem a bit too long for what they are describing, and both come at a point where something short and pithy would punch it up a bit. Just MHO. This piece stands beautifully on its own, but promise me if you ever meet a good composer you will turn this into a rock opera!!! |
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Thank you for your kind remarks. One thing I hope comes through is just how much I looved the place.
There is a change I considered to Small Leviathon which was to leave out three lines, thus:
----- It would take a little more thought to reduce Dolls' Carousel but I'll take a look at it with fresh eyes. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Bob, those are amazing. Your love of the place does come through. My favorite is Enclosed Infinity...wonderful! I especially liked this line: "The vertigo viewpoint succeeds."
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I have a performance to do at Wolverhampton Writers in a couple of weeks. Normally I read prose selections from my travel writing but I'm thinking of rehearsing this as a performance piece and filling my fifteen minutes with it.
I've just had a practice run through and it took thirteen minutes which gives me just time for a brief explantory introduction and a note at the end that if anyone wonders what the hell it was all about I can show them some pictures. What do you think. Should I go for it? This message has been edited. Last edited by: BobHale, "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Go for it, Bob. This could be your big chance to launch a new career. ..... LOL
Go for it !! |
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A career in poetry? I have a feeling it doesn't pay very well. But what did you think of it all. You can be honest. I won't take offence. I'm inclined to pay attention to someone who writes as well as you do. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Come to that I'd appreciate comments from anyone.
If you really think it stinks tell me, and tell me why - use a PM if you like. I'd genuinely like any kind of constructive remarks - pro- or anti-. It's the not knowing that drives me crazy. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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They're very good, Bob.
Sadly that means you stand no chance of getting published in the OBEV - nothing of this quality ever appears in that volume. Richard English |
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What, even the ones that don't rhyme? Just joshing, old chap. Thanks for the appreciation. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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It reminded me of things Danny Elfman has performed.
Myth Jellies Cerebroplegia--the cure is within our grasp |
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Sigh. One wonders if you've ever picked up the 1990's Christopher Rick's version of this book. You have to wait until page 593 (of 742) before you even get to the work of a poet born in the twentieth century (Basil Bunting). I don't think even you could damn Quiller-Couch or his (early 1900s) choices, though he had included some poems that do not rhyme and have strange meters, but then anything's possible. (Or, perhaps you were thinking of Helen Gardner's 1970s version.) —Ceci n'est pas un seing. |
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I'm not sure that ths is the proper place to put this "critique," so I will put it here and hope no one objects.
* * ** *** ***** ******** ***** *** ** * * Bob, although I have not yet all of your travelogs and other writings, I hope you agree that "The House On The Rock" should be ranked as your masterpiece. Your superior artistry is manifested in alliteration and surprising twists of words. More POWER to you. ~~~~~ jerry |
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And I have to add that they mean a whole lot more when you've been to the House on the Rock, and love it they way I do. Bob, they are excellent, in my opinion. I just don't have the poetic expertise to do a lot of critique on them, so I don't really have any suggestions. In fact, I disagree with Bethree about "The Doll's Carousel" and " Small Leviathan;" I adore them the way they are...especially "The Doll's Carousel." As I read it, I remember it. So wonderful.
The only criticism I might have would be that they mean a whole lot more when you've been there. I am not sure that I'd appreciate them as much as I do if I didn't know House on the Rock. [P.S. You should copyright them. I am afraid someone could Google them and then use them as advertising for the House on the Rock.] |
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Now that was a real concern when I was writing it, and remains a real concern now I'm thinking of performing it. Is it only comprehensible to people who have been there? Obviously it's more meaningful if you have, but does it lose too much if you haven't. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Considering that Nightmare Before Christmas is one of my favourite movies that's the best compliment so far. Thanks! "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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I've heard, but never been sure of the truth of, that a masterpiece was the piece of work turned out by an apprentice to prove that he was now good enough to be considered a master. Is this true or is it some faux etymology? "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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Not only have I picked it up, but I have read it and own a copy. Richard English |
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Gentlemen. I'd prefer to keep discussions of the merits of the OBEV separate from this thread where I really just want people to tell me how good I am.
I'll settle for how bad if that's the way anyone feels. Thank you in advance for your compliance with this small request. Bob. "No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Samuel Johnson. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. My new blog - which I hope to keep more up to date than my old one. And don't miss this - my unpublished book, coming a chapter a week |
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I'd prefer to keep discussions of the merits of the OBEV separate from this thread
Good enough, Bob. Fear not. I'll stop tilting at the windmills. [Here] I really just want people to tell me how good I am. Well, let me tell you then that you're not only good but great! I especially like how you managed to capture a specific time and place (your visit to the THotR) and overlain it with just a touch of childlike awe contrasted with a natural, adult skepticism. There's also a feeling of the fin de siècle, (the final gasp of a decadent age, recreating a certain milieu and its prevailing attendant attitude), that comes through powerfully and artfully. I haven't been to THotR, but I have a decent idea of what it must have been like for you to have been there and to have experienced it, because you have communicated that feeling so well. In fact, your poems, apart and together, have done what all great poetry must do: describe how it was that the poet felt at a certain time and place about something which he thought well worth communicating, and having done that well and memorably. There was some, little thing that reminded me of the dust and smell of oil on a hot summer's afternoon in some tiny museum in some small town off the beaten path. And there's something horrific, just out of view, around the corner, something you get in some of Ray Bradbury's writing. Something eldritch and Gothic. You want to flee, but you want to slow down and watch in fascination. (I see that Neil Gaiman located the action of one of his novels in THotR.) Bravo, I say. —Ceci n'est pas un seing. |
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