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Some have commented that our limericks thread is so long that it takes quite a bit of time to load on their computers. So I've started a continuation thread here.
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If the Limerick thread is too long
And if Schuphitz deems that is wrong He can just go ahead And spin a new thread And the rest of us travel along. |
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TrossL, your last limerick(s) was delicious, witty & sensual! What a talent you have. Having begun to write these limericks (and even a few dactyls), I realize that, in the end, it is the content and wit that count. That's where you see the real talent. Many here, besides TrossL, have shown a great deal of talent.
No matter what the sweet King says, that's where my limericks peter out. Perhaps I have caught on to the meter, my rhyming is good, and I may even have a little alliteration now & then....but my content is mundane; case in point, a limerick about my dog--as TrossL writes about "thighs"!  |
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Seeing as how we are taking our subject to a fresh, new thread, this seems like an opportune time to put the monarchy to bed.
The original idea was to establish a challenge so that other limerickists (word?) would attempt to gain the crown through competition which would lead to better and better pieces. In particular, I completely expected R.E. and Hic et ubique to jump into the fray in a big way. This didn't exactly happen and my "crown" became primarily a target for brickbats (loving, respectful brickbats, maybe, but still...) snowballs, and etc. Oh, well. No biggie. Also, as TrossL mentioned on the DD thread, the grading system may have put some people off to the extent that they hesitated to contribute. This certainly was not my intention. Lastly, I was recently attempting some character development which I (apparently alone) thought might be interesting. The "rewriting the OED" idea was going to blossom into a Mad King scenario in which I was going to eventually invade and attempt to conquer TrossL's DD realm in a "Mother of all Threads" parody of our recent madness in the Middle East. What was I thinking? Obviously this would have entailed too much work and, even in the beginning stages, it seemed like I was only pissing people off. So. As my final regal proclamation, I declare this thread to be monarch-free. The King, while not dead, is civilianized. I am abdicating the throne for the woman I love. If any of you are so enclined, Britney Spears and I are registered at Tiffany's, Neiman Marcus, and White Castles. The ex-King has spoken. |
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His Majesty, need we explain,
Has the grace to relenquish his reign His note indicates That he now abdicates As his subjects we never complain ....... well, hardly ever ! * ** *** ***** ******** ******** ***** *** ** * Whispered question for sensitive ears: While you're strollin' along with Miss Spears: Who pays for the jitney For transporting Britney, Our taxes, or your lordly peers? ~~~ jerry [This message was edited by jerry thomas on Mon Mar 10th, 2003 at 15:06.] |
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Feelings on forums are funny;
People are not always that sunny. Forgive and forget; Don't be upset. (I wish I could make this line punny!) |
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CJ gave up the throne!
It was his decision alone He had a wonderful reign But sometimes was a pain And he frequently made me groan. (But ya' know I love's ya' CJ!)  |
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Revenant your Limerick's in keeping
With traditional guilt-inspired weeping Perhaps you were misled And the girl in the shed Was really not dead, only sleeping |
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quote: "revenant" is the French adjective for "returning." By extension "returning from death," which seemed appropriate to your Limerick. With that spelling, it's grammatically masculine gender. "revenante" is the feminine form of the same word. Sorry I didn't explain that.  I'm curious and would like to ask how you happened to choose your "handle."~~~ jerry [This message was edited by jerry thomas on Tue Mar 11th, 2003 at 8:21.] |
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Before you ask, revenant, I'll explain my response to your reply, which was, "Curiosity killed the cat."
Saying "Come again?" is one of the ways we express the idea that we have not understood what has just been said -- or written. It calls for a repeat of the response, perhaps in other words. It's also a "play on words," or a "pun." You will find an abundance of such stuff in this Wordcrafters Community. Because your "handle" means "returning," "or one who returns," it inspired me to write, "Come again?" Whew! Have you been here before, and just returned? Is all of this, for you, déja vu? One more question ==> Are you a blond(e)?? ~~~ jerry [This message was edited by jerry thomas on Tue Mar 11th, 2003 at 12:15.] |
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Well, Revenant, whatever the reason for your handle, welcome aboard!
     We hope to see more of you! |
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M-H defines revenant as "one that returns after death or a long absence", so, welcome back, Revenant. (Grammatically that should be "one who returns..." After C J finishes updating the OED, maybe he'll straighten out M-W.)
The OED defines it as "One who returns from the dead; a ghost. Also attrib., as adj., and fig." or "One who returns to a place". Both sources date it to 1827. The OED also gives an obsolete meaning (from 1440): "One who returns to a place". Tinman |
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Our shy Asa has sent me a limerick and has given me permission to post it:
There once was a lady named TrossL Who thought she'd give Jerry a jostle But JT turned her down As he said with a frown, Alas, I've become an apostle! |
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I do need to learn my words with more depth as they get me into trouble way too often!
Once again our Kalleh does error; Let's kick her fat derriere! Ignorant of "jostle", Offending our TrossL, And making things tense for Jerr(y) Thank God CJ is no longer grading these! I am sorry, TrossL, Jerry and Asa. |
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It's time to respond to the jossL
Allegedly offered by TrossL There's no need for courage Comparing my age with your age You're invited to call me a fossL |
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quote: Grading, no (the sound you heard was my brain exploding at first reading) but critiquing, well... Change "error" (a noun) to "err" (the verb you were looking for) and not only does the "err/derriere" rhyme work but the also rhyming "Jerr(y)" at the end gives the piece that final fillip that makes for a superior limerick. Tex-KHS |
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Yes, CJ, you of course are right about the word "err". I was having too much fun, I guess, with the word "derriere" to pay close attention. Sweet Shufitz said I shouldn't have used the word fat so that definitely made my day!
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I'm Available
Dear TrossL, what could your excuse be? In all aspects of sex from A to Z, This gal with the duck Is familiar? What luck! You're my friend so why not introduce me?! Hmmmm... Meter & structure: D (line #2 shaky) Rhymes: C (ditto) Text, heartfelt: A (last line a good closer, but...) Overall: a weak C The king (lower case k) is rusty |
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quote: Very rusty. The metre is so easy to fix I'm surprised at you. How about TrossL, what could your reason be? In all aspects of sex - A _to_ Z, This gal with the duck Is your friend? Oh, what luck! So am I, so please introduce me. And that only took about five second's work. The first two lines still don't make much sense but the metre's fixed. You need more practice. Vescere bracis meis. Read all about my travels around the world here. Read even more of my travel writing and poems on my weblog. |
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quote: See what happens when you only take five seconds? The whole thing was driven by the last line "you're my FRIEND so why NOT introDUCE me" so this makes your first line out of kilter. I don't see your elimination of a syllable here and there as any major improvement but, on the other hand, it's not a disimprovement (word?) either. However... |
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quote: Ba-BOOM! This one hits the mark. I had worked a while with a "seduce me" line but abandonned it as a bit of a cheat seeing as how the last two rhyming syllables of lines 2 and 5 would actually be not rhymes but identical. "(se)DUCE me" rhymes with "(ex)CUSE be" but not, technically, with "(intro)DUCE me" again, or at least that's my understanding of it. In this case, however, a little less pedantry on my part would have made for a better piece, especially that contrived "from A to Z" part. Well done. The final standings: TrossL - A My original - a weak C B.H. - a slightly weaker C Shufitz & Kalleh - F (no limerick turned in before the time limit) Morgan - C+ (for the limerick she would have turned in if she had had the time. I'm sure it would have been wonderful.) |
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An "F" again, for dear, sweet Kalleh? Here I am, slaving away, at a conference in DC; I have not even read about this competition. More time, teacher???? Please?????
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I'm guessing CJ never read the last limerick I posted here.
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TrossL's on lie, I espy,
So I write these remarks on the fly. Besides being prettier She's sharper and wittier,¹ Cuter and cleverer than I. ¹Much like the author of Snow Bound. |
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Our CJ gives Kalleh an "F";
This grade falls on ears that are deaf! An over-achiever Who works like a beaver, This Kalleh requests a new ref! |
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