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I was reading the "severe" weather report for our area and found this wording awkward: Were I to write that sentence, I'd not use the "what." What does the "what" add to that sentence? Or is it just a matter of style?This message has been edited. Last edited by: Kalleh, | ||
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What does the "what" add to that sentence? Or is it just a matter of style? That's funny, it's not the "what" I find distracting, but the "with". Experience, for me, is a transitive verb. It would be good to see the whole sentence, "... likely worse than the storm we experienced late last September." With the sentence as you quoted it, it just seems awkward what with the passive voice and the "with". I sure others will have different complaints. —Ceci n'est pas un seing. | |||
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OK,. I did what I should've done first, googled it.
So the antecedent for "what" is "flooding of areas near the lake". So, now I'll rewrite the sentence: "Impacts: large and battering waves may result in the flooding of areas near the lake, which is likely to be worse than that which was experienced late last September." —Ceci n'est pas un seing. | |||
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Ah, that's much better. It came up on one of my apps, and now it's not there so it's a good thing you found it. | |||
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still too wordy for weather reporting IMO. I like, "may result in the flooding of areas near the lake, likely worse than that experienced late last September." ah we are all editors at heart | |||
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Or, simply, "If you can't swim, RUN!" | ||
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I mostly wondered about that use of "what." I'd seen it before, but I've never liked using it that way. | |||
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...likely worse than the late September floods. WM | |||
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